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 the adventure of Mike and his Pokemon 
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Hiyah! I'm just new here. anyway, i'm here doing a story of my own imagination. I'm not gonna put any pokemon images there coz i don't know how yet, i'm only knew as i said... just read and give comments for this. BTW, the story sets in a whole new region of Dionne...


CHAPTER 1
It's already 8:10 in the morning at Stonestall Village. Mike remembered that he must see Professor Maple at his lab. Mike got up, went downstairs to see his mom and ate breakfast. While eating, he remembered he must see Prof. at 8:00 in the morning. Oh no! I'm already late! He ate faster and faster. 8:20 in the clock, he get his bagpack, bid goodbye to his mom and kiss her at the cheecks. I wish Professor Maple is still there...

When he got outside, he saw Andre, his not-so-friendly neighbor and his future rival, walking and holding a Pokeball. Man! Andre already got one! hmmm...What's he Pokemon gotta be...He went to the Prof's lab. Once inside, luckily, he saw Prof. Maple. "Woah, that's close. I thought you're not gonna be here." Mike said to Prof. Maple while getting close to him. "You're very lucky, Mike. Okay. By the way, as I said before, you could now have a Pokemon. Here. I have the only Pokemon left. Andre already took the other one. Take this Pokemon and give it good care. If I saw him exhausted and you didn't give him enough care, I will know it and I will take it back." Prof said while giving the Pokemon to Mike. "Yes! My very first Pokemon! Thanks, Prof. I owe you much." "That's nothing. I just want to help you and other kids to have their first Pokemon. By the way, you can have these Pokeball. They can help you to you adventure. Now you can go now." "Prof Maple, Thanks." Mike heads to the door and went outside.

Mike saw Andre, who is waiting outside the lab. Andre knew Mike is gonna get also a Pokemon. "You also got one, huh. Anyway, do you know what Pokemon you have? haha. I already know mine and it's gonna be strong." Andre said. "I'll see who's my Pokemon. Wait, just wait there." "Okay, fine. Make it fast. I don't want to wait long." Mike went to the other side of Prof's lab. there, he threw the Pokeball. Red flash came out, Mike is excited who it will gonna be, the red flash formed, the red flash shaped like a telephone, Mike closely look, the shape is having colors. It colored blue, And it already formed. And it is...Beldum! "A Beldum? What's a Beldum doing in my Pokeball? Is this my Pokemon?" Mike is dissapointed for the Pokemon he got. "Okay fine. Beldum, back to the Pokeball. *sigh*"

Mike didn't know what Beldum is capable of, who will Beldum evolve to and how strong Beldum will be. He just know that size does matter, knowing that Beldum is a small Pokemon.

Now, what Andre's Pokemon gotta be? I wish it'll be small too. Mike went the other side to meet Andre. "So, you already know what Pokemon you have?" "Yep. And it's all good. Yeah, very bad" Mike said "Okay, catch you later. I'll go see my mom and let her know that I have already my Pokemon." Mike worriedly said. "Hey Mike, don't be such a hurry. Before going to your house, how 'bout a litte Pokemon Battle? We'll just see who's the better Pokemon. Do you like my idea?" Andre asked. "What!? Are you joking? I..er..I mean, yes, I li...liked your idea. hehe. Um...lets have a Po...Pokemon battle...later. You agree?" Miked said. "Why later? Are you scared? hehe. What a scaredy cat." Andre joked. "No am not. Um...Okay...er...fine! Let's have a Pokemon Battle!" Mike shouted, insulted by the joke of Andre.

"Go...er...go, Beldum!" Mike threw the Pokeball. Beldum got out. "Haha. A Beldum, eh. A small Pokemon. Ok, here's mine! Go, Slakoth!"
Andre shouted. Andre threw te Pokeball. Mike saw Slakoth. It's bigger than my Beldum. Okay fine. Here goes. "Beldum, ah...er...attack... whatever attack you have!" Beldum take Slakoth down. "That hurts a little. Anyway, Slakoth, Scratch!" Slakoth scatched Beldum. The battle goes just like this and like that, always using Take Down and Scratch.

After a moment, both trainers had been exhausted. "Trainer battle is really tiring. I'll just have some rest." Mike said. "Okay fine. Let's stop this battle. I'm so tired. I'll just go out of town. Your Pokemon is tough but mine is thougher. Catch ya later, alligater. haha!!" Andre said while heading home. "Okay. You're great at battling, Beldum. I thought you're nothing but you almost defeat Slakoth. I highly underestimate you. Sorry for that. Anyway, let's just go back home. Let's rest there." Mike went to his house and introduce Beldum to his mother.


Mon May 01, 2006 11:15 pm
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Okay, this is chapter 2. hope you like my story/fanfic...:)
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CHAPTER 2
Mike is ready to go out of town and follow Andre. Not really following Andre but doing Andre will also do. Mike is ready to go, settling all his items and saying goodbye to his mom. Mike went outside. This is the first time I will see Stonestall Village for a while. Mike went to the route 501 and begins the adventure.

It's a not-so-long and not-so-short route. Few trainers from StoneStall Village already passed here and that includes Andre. If they can, then I can too. After some steps, Mike had encounter NidoranM. "haha. First Pokemon encounter and first catched Pokemon." Mike took one of his Pokeballs and threw it to NidoranM. Mike crossed his fingers. "C'mon. You can do it." The Pokeball struggles at first then after a while, it stopped. "Yes! My first catched Pokemon! It's my lucky day." Now, he has two Pokemon in his belt. "I have now two Pokemon, and I will have many Pokemon to catch."

After 30 minutes of walking, being exhausted, encountering Pokemon and battling them, he arrived at a tollgate. "A tollgate in a route? Hmmm...this looks suspicious." Mike wandered around the tollgate. He noticed a poster sticked on the wall. It has a big capital letter H on the poster and the poster is holograph. What's this poster means? Let's just go inside. the tollgate is deserted. "Why is it deserted? Anyway, I'll just dont mind it." Mike didn't mind to wander inside the tollgate cause he's very tired and he need some rest. All he's thinking is to get to Grateleef City, the next city and sleep.

Mike just continues his journey to Grateleef City. After 15 minutes, eventually he arrived at Grateleef city. The city is medium-sized and is full of houses. He went first to the Pokecenter and heals {Beldum} and NidoranM. Then he went to some place where he can eat. He already finished eating and it's already 7:30 in the evening. He didn't mind to wander at the city. He went to the nearest inn and order for a room to sleep in. But before sleeping, he thought that he will challenge the gym leader here...

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Wed May 03, 2006 12:41 am
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hiyah guyz! sorry for the next update. anyway, i'll not update this anymore, coz i need to finish the other chapters. i'll just post another new thread and therre update it daily up to the final or i'll edit it here but i'll guess that this thread will low there down. i'll just think about it. soprry for the inconvienience. hope you understand:)


Thu May 04, 2006 5:51 pm
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i really liked your story. i give it a 4/5.


Sat May 13, 2006 5:24 pm
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Yours is not bad compared to most other fics here, but all I'm saying is, DON'T use the icons.


Mon Jun 19, 2006 9:23 pm
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You have way too many mistakes with tense and verbs, giving me the idea english isn;t your first language. Also, the fact that these kids got beldum and slakoth as starters is bizarre- let alone that nobody picked beldum and it was left as a spare.

Also, there's nothing special so far. In every way, this is exactly with every. single. journey. fanfiction. You'll have to add more twists and special-type thigns if you expect your story to be any different from all the others.


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