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This is my first story, so be sure to leave comments with constructive critisism, or your opinion! FYI Don't coment on grammar errorrs unless they are really big please!

Chapter 1

"See ya tommorow".
"Bye!".
"Great battle dude, let's have a rematch tommorow!".
"Sure!".
Steven let the voices wash over him as he walked down the dull hall towards the door. He was jostled by the constant stream of bodies moving every direction and filling the hallway. Their voices usually turned into an endless drone, but he could pick out a few small conversations.
"You drop that pokeball in this school, and you are going straight to detention!".
"Sorry Mrs. Finch...".
Finally, he broke through the crowd and pushed his way through the shiny glass doors. He was just starting across the withered grass, when a voiced called out.
"Hey! You just dropped this!".
Steven turned, and a slight girl with long light brown hair walked over to him, and handed hin his Battle Studies notebook. He had scribbled on pictures of ris favourite pokemon battling. A Rapidash sparred with a Vaporeon... A an Arbok, coiled to strike a Porygon...
"Thanks... A lot!" he blustered.
"You're welcome." she smiled. There was an akward pause.
"I'm Lana".
"Steven". Another akward pause.Her mouth turned up at the corners.
"Well... See you around then" Lana said quietly.
"Yeah, sure...". He started to say more,but she was already gone.
Steven strolled dom the main street of Viridian, his Oddish bouncing along beside him. "Odd, odd!" it squealed as a small, probably young Rattata raced out onto the road with a challenge it's eyes.
"Crap!," Steven groaned," We don't have any more potions... Oh well!". "Oddish, use poison powder!" he shouted.
Oddish sprang into acton, and shook the bright green leaves on it's head. A cloud of purple spores drifted toward Rattata. The inexperienced Rattata ran right through the cloud, and landed a solid tackle on Oddish. "Good! We got it poisoned, now oddish, use your absorb attack!" Steven crowed.
Oddish started glowing a fain green coulour, and Rattata stopped dead, and shook slightly, it's energy being drained. The Rattata blinked, leaped forward, and smashed oddish with a tail whip. " Oddish are you all right!?" Steven asked, panic clear in is voice.
Oddish stood up, and nodded to him. Rattata rushed forward,but before it hit, Oddish leaped to the side at the last moment, and got Ratttata point blank with an acid. The Rattata whimpred in fear, and scurried away into the bushes." Great job buddy, that was awesome battling, you're getting stronger!" Steven said brightly.
"Oddish, odd"
"You wanna go back in your ball?" He asked.
Oddish nodded.
"Okay," he said,and tapped it with it's ball. Oddish disapeared into the ball in a flash of bright light

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Tue Aug 31, 2010 1:35 pm
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Whoops, forgot to add that this is going to become T... The first chapter wasn't so hopefully I'm good. Im sorry if i offended anybody...LOL Can't say that with a straight face.

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Tue Aug 31, 2010 1:39 pm
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Chapter 2

When Steven entered his house, all was quiet. His house was a medium sized three floor house. The exterior was a deep brown colour, and inside there were many different shades of beige. The house used to bustle with activity before the acident... Now it was silent. Always silent... He walked into his messy room, filled with posters of his favourite pokemon champions. He sat down on his unmade bed, and stared at the walls, just thinking... He knew that he needed to go to the Pokemon Center, the Pokemart, and the grocery store, then make dinner. His older brother Liam never helped him with the chores. He sighed, and padded out of the room. First, he went to the big bright red Pokemon center to heal his Oddish. The red-headed nurse behind the counter greeted him cheerfully. She took Oddish's pokeball, and placed it into the machine. In a few short seconds, the pokeball popped out of the machine, fully healed.
"There you are!" the nurse said sweetly,"See you next time!".
"Thanks," he muttered.
The walk to the Pokemart was not long. Steven stepped into the cool building, and scanned the shelves. He picked up a basket of fresh berries, a few potions, and a paralyze heal. He set the money on the counter, and strolled out. On his way to the Grocery store, he passed th gym. He looked wistfully in its direction, wondering when he would start his Pokemon journey... Steven walked right into someone. The boy looked about 16, with bright red spiked hair, that reminded Steven of flames. His face was perfectly symetrical, and arching eyebrows. He turned a cold glare to Steven. His eyes were a srange pale gray, contrasting with his bright hair.
"What was distracting you?" he said in a calm voice. His eyebrows arched even higher.
"Th-The gym... I was thinking about challenging the g-gyms..." Steven stuttered. There was something strange about this boy, his eyes held no emotion. The boy kept staring.
"Have you challenged a gym before?" He questioned.
"N-no" Steven answered.
"I thought not" the strange boy said. He turned and walked away. The glittering prismatic "C" on the back of the boy's shirt was the last thing Steven saw of him.

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Tue Aug 31, 2010 6:00 pm
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Sorry for the short chapters people, I'm going to work to make the chapters longer, I"ve just been busy.

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Tue Aug 31, 2010 6:02 pm
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Chapter 3

The next day at school, Steven

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